Thursday 25 October 2012

Fiction - Thriller - Ashes


Ashes

Chapter 2

 
As soon as he saw him he knew he would kill him.

That was yesterday morning.

He woke before the alarm clock . He got up washed, dressed and went downstairs. In the kitchen he was greeted by his overweight black labrador with a soft  whine.

“Sch! be out in a minute old boy.” But he was up and the dog was excited, it roamed up and down in front of the back door eager to be out. He filled the kettle, found his cigarettes. He caught a glimpse of his red faced coughing fit reflected in the mirror and turned away. He knew he smoked too much. He also drank too much and put on weight.  Village life was comfortable, the local pub was too close, it had good beer acceptable food. He could forget his past and lose himself by the fireside. There were worse things in life than teaching in a rural Secondary school. His present life had made him soft. He made tea, checked the time and smoked for a while. When he finished he took an old waxed jacket and cap from the back of the door and put them on. From the kitchen drawer he took the gun which was wrapped in a duster and an old pair of thin leather gloves. He put the gloves into a side pocket and the  gun into a large poachers pocket behind him in the bottom of the coat.

It was warm in the sun, it was a beautiful Cotswold morning.

 

 The night before he prepared everything.

He was sweating when he came back into the house. He found the shoe cleaning box and put it on newspapers spread out on the table. It was full of old half used polish tins, cotton rags. He found a pair of lint gloves. He poured himself a large single malt put  the gloves on and fetched the gun. It was another thing he had let go, it had not been cleaned in years. He smoked while he worked methodically stripping and cleaning the gun. Reassembled, he tested its weight, it had been a long time since he had held it. He wiped each high pressure cartridge shell clean and loaded them into the magazine, they made the gun more accurate and reliable. He would miss the Luger it had been a good friend. The dead Russian that he had taken it from probably thought the same.

 

He walked the dog every morning before school, down the lane towards the village  into the wood, up the hill, along the top field and back round to the house. Fifteen minutes all round. It was on the walk yesterday that he had seen him. Older, but it was him and in good shape.  He looked like he could still beat a man to death with his bare hands – no matter how long it took. He was a  violent man and he had taken care of his primary asset, his body. He looked hard and lean in the blue tracksuit. Running steadily he was hardly out of breath. He literally looked twenty years younger than he was. The Nazi’s believed a man had to be as swift as a greyhound and as tough as Krupp Steel. He still looked like the Silesian thug he was. Born in a small Slavic village he had grown up watching his tribe being beaten, starved and raped by whichever country had invaded them at the time.  History had made him grow up to be hard and have no particular loyalty. The Poles came and took what they wanted, then the Russians would come and took what they wanted. The Germans came back and took what they said had always been theirs. He was whatever it was in his interest to be Pole, Russian, German. His real name was William Bielschowsky, but in the war he was Hans Bermann, there were advantages to being German. After the war he worked for the Russians because he was good at what he did. Working for Russian intelligence was the same as working for the Nazis. In life there were always problems to be cleared up, people who had to disappear, people who had to be found, people who had to talk, people who had to be quiet, permanently.

 

Inside the wood he let the dog off the lead and quickened his pace. If Bielschowsky  ran at the same time as yesterday morning he would be deeper into the wood, where the footpath took a turn left and back down to the village, but where he turned right on his own unofficial path  up through the trees to the top field. He slowed, put on the gloves and reached round for the gun. From his other pocket he took the suppressor  and attached it to the barrel, while keeping a steady pace. He glanced behind him, nothing. To his right there was  a thicket which would give him good cover. He slowed and turned again. Creatures of habit. Bielschowsky  was coming, relaxed, comfortable. He let himself be seen and made a show of calling the dog before disappearing behind the thicket. He wanted it to look normal, someone taking their dog for an early morning walk. Bielschowsky liked woods, he had lived, fought and killed in them most of his life.

 

He stepped into the path with the gun levelled. Bielschowsky  stopped, opened his mouth as if to speak. There was a sharp snap and a red dot appeared on his forehead, another snap ripped into his chest . He fell dead.

He bent down and grabbed Bielschowsky’s collar and dragged him up into the trees well away from the path. The shallow trench he had dug the night before was waiting. He dropped the gun in and rolled Bielschowsky on top.  He worked quickly covering the body  first with lime to speed decomposition and deter the foxes and badgers. Then  he covered it with earth and leaves.

When he had finished he examined the area, it all looked normal.  Someone would have to be looking very hard to notice any disturbance. It was now a matter of luck. Would anyone bother to come and look for him. Would anyone care.  He stood there and looked down at the ground, it was an old wound that had stayed with him all down the years, he couldn’t say he felt better. He turned, called the dog and walked home.

Fiction - Thriller - Ashes


 Ashes

 

Chapter 1


A noise woke her with a start. She normally slept well but something had disturbed her. The blinds were closed and the room was dark except the dull glow of the bedside alarm clock. She kept still and listened. There was someone in the room, someone searching through the drawers. She was afraid but also angry. Gunther had assured her that this would never happen, she would be safe, there would be people looking out for her. But here was some one going through her possessions. She could tell they were becoming impatient, making a mess throwing her clothes on the floor, some landing on the bed, on her feet. They were moving faster, making more noise.

She knew they wouldn’t find what they were looking for in the drawers. It wasn’t there.

“Right you fat old cow” a man said coming over to the bed. “Where is it?”

“Who are you? What do you want?”

“Stupid bitch!” He spat and punched her in the head. “Just fucking tell me!” She could taste blood in her mouth, her nose started to run and she could feel tears welling from the stinging blow. He knelt over her on the bed. “Hear this?” There was a metal clicking sound in her ear. “ I’m going to cut off your fingers one at a time till you tell me!”  He grabbed one of her hands.

“No please…. I’ll tell you.” She stammered. “Please…. I’ll tell you.” He got off the bed and she tried to sit up.

“Where? Hurry up.”

“Over there  in the walk-in wardrobe…. There’s a  box on the top shelf…..”

“Where the fuck….” He said turning round and crossing the room.

“That’s it …there is a light switch on the right, ” she encouraged. He groped  in the dark for a few seconds. She heard the door slid open with a bang and then the light came on. She was startled when she saw him, a skinhead, a tall well built neo-Nazi thug, dressed all in black.  He had moved into the wardrobe and she could hear boxes and cases crashing on to the floor. Her anger came back.

There was muffled swearing from inside the wardrobe and then it went quiet. He reappeared in the doorway silhouetted against the light.

“You fucking old….” A bullet ripped into his throat. Another popping sound came from the bed and a second bullet smashed into his head sending him backwards into her clothes where he fell dead.

She lowered the gun and calmed herself before picking up the phone. She dialled a local number and waited until a disgruntled man answered.

“Do you know what time it is? This better be good.”

“There is rubbish on my floor, come and take it away -  now.”

“What?” There was a pause as the person tried to make sense of what they were hearing. “ What are you talking about?”

“I am very angry Gunther. I’m an old woman, you said this would not happen.”

“What has happened?”

“You can see for yourself when you get here,” she said shortly. There was a pause and then he asked.

“Did they get anything?”

“No. I took care of it.” Neither of them spoke for a moment and then she said. “I’m fine, no need to ask how I am.”

“Yes, of course, sorry, how are….”

“…save it Gunther. I hope you will be better organised in cleaning up this mess than you were at preventing it!” There was silence, then she continued. “My God this would never have happened in the old days. People knew how to do their duty, back then there were consequences for people who failed…serious consequences.”

“I’ll be there immediately.”

Monday 15 October 2012

SEX - writing about it and Lee Child.


SEX  -  writing about it and Lee Child.

 

Our maths teacher told us that there was a formula for everything in life. To make a cross curriculum point he told us there was even a formula for ‘writing’. The average novel, he said, is 50,000 words with 200 words a page which makes 200 pages in total. The sex, he said, now having our complete attention, will be on pages 8, 16, 32, 64, 128 or there abouts! It is done that way to keep your interest. However, he added, you could just hold the book up by its covers and it will fall open at the sex scenes.

 

Publishers have a formula for the costing and production of books, which can be, and often is, done with a cursory glance at the manuscript. After choosing a font, the size of the page and the number of pages a publisher can arrive at a basic unit cost. How much a publisher can reasonably ask for 200 bits of paper and a bit of card depends on several factors. But in truth the value of a novel is a bit like the value of an apple, no matter how hungry you are or how good the apple is, it is only ever going to be worth pence not pounds.

 

A writer greatly interested in sex and writing books to a formula was George Simenon. He was renowned for allegedly having sex with over a thousand women and being able to write a 200 page book in 11 days. He would mark  a calendar with a red cross each day for eight days as he wrote the novel, and then leave himself three days for re-editing. Some of his early novels might be considered ‘pulp fiction’ but the later novels are good if not great literature. The Maigret novels are without doubt some of the best crime fiction ever written. Simenon knew that in writing about sex  -  less was more, and he also avoided the problems of cliché ridden sex scenes. It is almost impossible to imagine the chaste Inspector Maigret indulging in hanky panky with the ever proper Madam Maigret. But he was a Parisian policeman after all, he knew about the ways of the world, even if he was not tempted like his creator. Maigret’s observations about women are often sensual, never crude, just dispassionate and honest, and all the better for it.

 

A lot of authors feel that they ‘have’ to write sex scenes, after all, it is part of the formula of a good book. But as the annual Bad Sex in Fiction Award suggests some authors just can’t do it! Trying to describe the beast with two backs takes a certain amount of flair, avoiding cliché requires talent. Most authors get away with bad sex scenes I suspect, because most readers do not write ‘yours disgruntled’ letters to the press about bad sex.

 

I like Lee Child’s book  - but he broke his formula. I would have loved to have been a fly on the wall when he and the editor met up to discuss the manuscript for The Affair. Who had the temerity to tinker with the Jack Reacher formula? For years, Child like Simenon, kept the sex in ‘the less is more’ camp, and did well because of it -  no embarrassing or silly sex scenes.  No one reads a Reacher novel for the sex, they read to see what the very smart and very tough guy is up to. Reacher is one of those great literary creations – he is charismatic – free, fair, honest, no weaknesses, no vulnerabilities, you care about him and you would like him as a friend.

 

The Affair was a shock, it had sex – a lot of it – enough to put it in the Bad Sex in Fiction category…. but it still has lots obligatory gratuitious violence, fist fights, shootings and killings. If you have not read the book (Spoiler alert – of a sort – not the plot!), I doubt you would find it difficult to imagine what might happen during the distant rumblings and eventual arrival of the earth shuddering, trembling midnight train!